Rewritten version, steaming on like a pro and boss!
I've decided to cull the routes to three rather than four, mostly for ease of writing, and because it makes more sense given the story.
I've also changed Rachel's personality a little - in Nice Day, she's a talkative girl who talks about everything. I figured it stood to reason she thought a lot, too, and so she is more pretentious deep in this new revision.
The exposition scene with Alex has been shortened - I've decided it added little to the story other than words, and Rachel thinking about things seemed more appropriate. If the idea of the story is to provoke thought, the best way is to touch on philosophical subjects, right?!
Second route will involve ECONOMY, and comes in two flavours: staying at home, then refusing to go with Davis... or going out, then refusing to play with Alex. Both times, you have to refuse someone... isn't it sad?!
Third route is obviously OMG DAVIS I WANT YOU TAKE ME NOW so it's all lovey-dovey. I'm not actually looking forward to writing that!
I might have an artist, and the composer is still on-board. We'll see how this goes~
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